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They hardly bother to lower their voices anymore.  He can hear them, three, four, five seats over, sometimes more, dissecting his life as if they were God, and had that right.  He sees the stares in the hallway, though some of them try to make it less obvious.  Some of them don’t.

“You’ll burn in Hell, Michael.”  The boy fingers the school-issued crucifix around his neck.  The boy’s female companion sends Michael a look of deepest contempt and condescension.

Michael tries to appear as though he doesn’t notice.

It had been this way for a week now.  It had been a week since they had all found out.  That week had been the longest of Michael’s life.

It would also be the last week of his life.

The stares and whispers were at their height in church on Sunday.  Twenty four pairs of eyes watched him walk through the church.  Five pretended to find the floor enthralling.

As bad as all that had been, those five pairs of eyes—and voices, and tears, and accusations—had been by far the worst.  Michael’s family had turned their back on him.

Brian was the only thing Michael felt he had to live for anymore, and by the end of that week, even he wasn’t enough.

On Tuesday, Brian cried in his room because he had lost what felt like most of himself even as his family argued downstairs about how to cure their son’s disease.
©2006-2009 ~HeadmistressJack
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This was part of a test for my writer's craft class: we had to write a short story incorporating two elements from a list that was given to us. I chose "a secret is discovered" and "a judgement is made". So after I did the other part of the test, it left me with about half and hour to come up with a story from nothing, and then to write it XD And I don't work well under pressure, so it was really hard for me. But I actually think it turned out okay for the short amount of time I had to write it in ^_^ But I want to re-vamp it and make it better.....but I know I probably won't. Because I'm lazy XD
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Whether you come back to it or not, this is very well-written. It works well as a short piece, but almost reads like a piece of poetry for it's length and cryptic elements. Very well done, I must say!

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For some reason, the concept of a straight white male who supports gay rights, women rights, and adheres to his own code of chivalrous behaviour while thinking women should be as independent as they want is strange to some people...
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Why, Michael? Why would you do it?! +weeps some more+

I think this is possibly the best "secret's out" piece I've ever read. The language is FAULTLESS, the setting is marvelously done, and the mood is so tense and dramatic without coming off as over-the-top teenage angst. I just... wow. Everyone in the world should have to read this. Damn homophobia.... +cries+

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pooscoopgirl: it is a captiol idea isnt it
mo0nym0lester: captiol
mo0nym0lester: indeed
pooscoopgirl: duck you
wow ._. thanks a lot, man. you have no idea how much it means to me to have someone actually READ something of mine, and then take the time to make such an amazing comment about it.

thanks ._.

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~the-jackyll << My writing account.

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